WALT :
- Use paragraphs to link similar ideas together.
- Write in structured, well developed paragraphs that flow well from one to the next within the text.
- Use linking words and phrases to link paragraphs for effect.
This week in Room 6 we learnt about paragraph writing. We had to create two or more paragraphs to describe a picture and write a backstory. We first brainstormed words using the Five Senses : See, Hear, Feel, Taste and Smell.
What I enjoyed was learning about paragraph writing.
What I found hard was using the correct sentence structure.
Next time I will try and make the sentences flow from one to the next.
Hopeless
The ragged man sits outside a wooden cabin by himself, alone, miserable and exhausted. As he waits in silence, he can hear the leaves rustling in the wind, and the sound of animals in the forest ahead. He can taste the salt from his sweaty face and can smell the old, dusty scent of the cabin. He can hear the thunder far away in the distance and the sound of rain drumming on the roof. Tears stream down his muddy face as he remembers his childhood when he had a loving family to go to and friends that would always be by his side. He had everything, but now, he had nothing.
He tried to think of good memories, good thoughts to keep him happy and motivated, though nothing can change the fact that he lost everything after the incident. He wondered what his son and daughter would have been doing. They would be playing in the backyard, smiling and laughing as they chase each other. His wife would be inside, preparing lunch for them, and the smell of warm blueberry pie would fill the whole house.
The memory fades away and in its place a car wreck on the side of the road. His wife and kids sitting motionless in the passenger seat with their eyes closed, lifeless. How could this have happened? He slowly backs away but accidentally stumbles backwards into the forest, leaves and twigs scratch against his skin.
His eyes snapped open as the sound of thunder brings him back to reality, now it was just him again. But in the distance, a bright light appears and starts coming closer and closer. Was someone trying to find him? Had people noticed he had been missing? He hears voices calling his name, but he is too weak to yell or walk so instead, he nervously waits for their arrival.